Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problems?

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Some citizens are in debt by

acquiering

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acquiring

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they don't need or can pay. it is important to educate

society

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differentiate

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what are articles are considered as a primary necessity than what

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not.

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people

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getting

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into

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debt which

are

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compulsive buying

behavior

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and too much advertisement in

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. One action to take to prevent

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issue is to add

tax

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on advertisements to regulate them and reduce their influence on

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people

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tend to buy

compulsitive

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compulsive

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item is a primary

necesity

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necessity

for their family.

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should invest

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eduactional

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educational

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programs to educate

society

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and help them to be aware

what

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of what

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items are considered as a

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neccesity

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necessity

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this

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will help

poeple

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people

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things

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which

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are

considere

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considered

vague, so they will reject buying

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they can not pay

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, Advertisements influenced the crowd to buy items that are on the

adds

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ads

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because

the

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they

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add

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suggest

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that smart

people

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belong to

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type of high status.

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this

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add

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invest huge amount of money to

convice

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convince

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that they must have it.

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the tv

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states "if you want to show that you have a successful life, you need to buy a

mercedes

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car."

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society

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end

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up getting a loan to buy

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product which later on they can not afford to pay back.

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need

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to be regulated by social programs in which help

people

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to understand that they really

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don

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not need to buy brands.

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, the action that needs to be taken to prevent

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get

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into debt is to reinforce laws that regulate advertisements by

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extra

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tax to

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this

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frivolous items.

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way

people

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will take into consideration that these products are not considered

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main necessity to have a great life.

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this

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label of

belong

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into

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a high class by having

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this

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expensive brands will

be reduce

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and eventually these ideas will

dissapear

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disappear

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people

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will not want to spend

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extra money to buy an expensive car and will consider other options

instead

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Toyata

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Toyota

has

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great credibility to

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durable cars

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low price . As a

reult

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result

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law will help to

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society

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and think if they really want to throw their money away or look for other affordable options. To conclude, more

people

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are getting into huge debts that they

woul

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would

not be able to pay

becuase

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because

they tend to buy frivolous

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wihtout

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without

thinking if

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is a real necessity. The two major reasons that bring

people

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asking

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for a loan are

unregulated

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advertisement and compulsive buying

behaviors

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behaviours

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this

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can

be reduce

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by improving regulation on

adds

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ads

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and

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programs to make aware our

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3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

471 words

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some people dislike changes in their society and in their lives,and want things to stay the same. why do some people want things to stay the same? why should change be regarded as something positive?

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