Advantages and disadvantages of mobile phone on young people

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Nowadays we are living in a modern world. I believe
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phone
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the phone
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is
more
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a more
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important device in
people
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daily life.
Mobile
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The mobile
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phone
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has transformed
people
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day to day life .It has changed
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the way
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to
connected
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each
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other . It has both positive and negative aspects .I believe its merits upwards its demerits
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with , Thanks to
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phone
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the phone
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I
has
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totally changed
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to communicate much faster than
the
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in the
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past .Most
people
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have Internet connection on
phone
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as a
resulte
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result
they can stay always connected with their near and dear ones .
People
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have some social network applications on
phone
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such
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as Facebook , WhatsApp, Twitter etc allow
to
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them to
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chat,
sharing
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videos and other important
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information
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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