The major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems. What are the problems that young people living in cities are facing? Give solutions to this.

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in the urban city brings a lot of problems to the youngster. In
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essay, I explain the sources of these problems and show some possible solutions to
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. There are a number of causes of the problem.
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overpopulation which leads to overcrowding and
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environmental
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quality of housing as well as sanitation that cause important health problems
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, the atmosphere quality in cities has been often poor, because of
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from traffic, the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. Water is often being rare
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the infrastructures – hotels, airports… In order to address the issues relative
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the urban, I believe it can
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the root causes.
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, the most effective method of doing it would be reclaiming the right to the city.
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, making the city more humane, accessible, liveable social space, reconfiguring approach to the planning, design, structure of architecture and landscape is needed.
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, the people are able to join in making what urban space they needed to live
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In conclusion, the major cities
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young people
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, I think they would face a highly competitive to help life better.
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