Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better caregivers for their young children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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parents
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children
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whereas
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sometimes
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caretaker
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a hard
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forget
children
.
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at the intial
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initial
stage
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high-quality
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in-order
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growing
children
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