Providing a national system in country where the unemployed receive a regular payment only encourage people not to seek work and puts an unreasonable strain on country’s financial resources. Discuss this statement and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
It is true that
money
has an inevitable role in the life of human beings. Some counties financially support their unemployed citizens by providing them with regular payments which in turn is an extra burden for the authorities
itself
. I will discuss Correct pronoun usage
themselves
this
view in this
essay before arriving at an opinion of mine.
On the one hand, it is argued by many that, it is really a blessing for the unemployed when authorities
provide some monthly or weekly payment for them. This
would mean that,
common man who Remove the comma
apply
have
no job Change the verb form
has
also
need to pay rent for their residence, water bill, electricity bill, need to buy groceries and so on. Public who have no income may depend on money
lenders and as a result
, their debt would rose
up. Wrong verb form
rise
Then
, finally
jobless Add a comma
,finally
people
become homeless and at the extreme end, as daily lots of news are reported on people
committing suicide due to debt through media. So, if they get money
from nation
, they can Correct article usage
the nation
also
lead a quality life. Hence
it is the responsibility of the government to give a hand to jobless individuals by giving them a
regular payment till they become independent.
On the downside, if Correct article usage
apply
authorities
help unemployed
by providing Correct article usage
the unemployed
money
it would make them dependent. To specific
, there is a chance that Add a missing verb
be specific
people
become too lazy and individual
never search for a job as they have enough Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
money
getting on a regular basis. Thus
, it would be extra
burden for the country as a whole which would Add an article
an extra
otherwise
, can use that cash for the overall development of the country. Moreover
, some people
get too high money
through national
payment system than the salary they will get if they go Correct article usage
the national
for
work. In Change preposition
to
such
a case there is a chance for people
exploiting
the government system. Change the verb form
to exploit
For instance
, in Australia, authorities
provide unemployed different benefits rather than regular national payments as jobless get a reduction in electricity bill
and in Fix the agreement mistake
bills
health
sector Add an article
the health
also
. Thus
, individuals think it is better to stay without job
. As a consequence, a good number of Add an article
a job
people
think providing financial assistance to jobless
make them lethargic and dependent.
In conclusion after Correct article usage
the jobless
analysis
both Replace the word
analysing
the
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apply
perspective
I am of the opinion that Add a comma
,perspective
positives
outweigh the negative side as Correct article usage
the positives
jobless
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the jobless
also
have the right to live in society. I think in future also
this
trend would likely to continue.Submitted by divyaesa2012 on
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