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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #places #people #ban
Although
,
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 many
people
 believe that smoking is acceptable convincing, I think in a reverse manner and agree with the given statement. My inclination is explained in the ensuing paragraph. Out of all the arguments of smoking is now actionable in open to public places, the strongest one to prove my view is smoking can cause a hazardous disadvantage to our health.
This
 is to say because diseases like cancers, heart issues, breathing problems can cause because
this
 smoking, I agree that there are several other reasons
also
 but smoking makes these diseases worst.
Besides
this
, it is
also
 true that smoking is not safe in the social place. By
this
 I mean it can affect other
people
 too. While someone is smoking around the individual that smoke is spread in an atmosphere and other citizens inhale the fumes of cigarettes, it can result in the health effect they may get suffocated through inside.
However
, the other reason to prove my point is nations like Norway, New Zealand, Italy, Bhutan, Sweden are restricted to smoking in their territory because the population who does not smoke are
also
 suffered from smoking gases, to avoid
this
 government can interdict smoking in their particular area. In ,addition the fact that civilians want to save the public from dangerous diseases ,
for example
, cancer.
On the contrary
, some
people
 counterclaims that smoking is necessary and should not be outlawed. The foremost argument they do because they get habitual with smoking, it may release their stress.
Also
, it may be possible that some public is not aware of the side effects of smoking,
besides
this
 nowadays, disadvantages are written in a packet of cigarettes and tobacco. So
people
 should be aware of that.
Thus
 to wrap up a discussion, smoking is hazardous for every individual and it should be restricted to avoid health issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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