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Many people think that some individuals are naturally good leaders. Other think that people can learn leadership skills. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are distinct views on being a good leader. Whereas some
people
 claim that
individuals
 are born with
this
 characteristic, others object to that view and argue that
leadership
, as well as other
skills
, can be learned during life. I tend to agree with the
second
 view, as from my point of view, not only
people
 can learn whatever they want to, but
also
 nowadays there is a plethora of courses, books, and training about
leadership
skills
. On the one hand, some
individuals
 argue that a good leader is a talent some
people
 were born with. They support
this
 idea because, in the past, the number of resources
for example
 books, courses or talks related to
leadership
skills
 was much fewer than nowadays.
Consequently
, learning or training essential characteristics of
leadership
such
 as public speaking, how to motivate others, self-control and so on before receiving the position of manager was difficult and only
individuals
 who already had a predisposition of
this
 behaviour were considered good leaders.
On the other hand
, other
people
 believe that
leadership
skills
 are not in a person’s DNA and can be learned through experience, education, and training. Since experience and education prepare
individuals
 to deal with success or even failure.
This
 kind of training became famous because of the great results some
people
 have achieved after doing it.
For instance
, recently the company I am working for paid to the managers and coordinators
leadership
 training and in
this
 course, they have learned communication and creativity
skills
.
Thus
, I could observe that my direct boss significantly improved his skill. To sum up,
although
 some
individuals
 were born with certain characteristics fundamental of
leadership
such
 as communication, I personally believe that through training everyone can be a good leader.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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