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2-More and more people are choosing to eat ready-made meals rather than freshly cooked food. Does this trend have more advantages than disadvantages?

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Nowadays
people
 have a lot of workload during the
day
 which is why they do not have time to cook.
As a result
 of
this
, ready-made
meals
 are preferred by
people
day
 by
day
.
This
 trend has advantages and disadvantages. As/since I am one of those who support healthy
food
, eating ready-made
food
 has more disadvantages than advantages.
First
 of all, eating ready-made
meals
 has certain disadvantages. If
people
 eat ready
meals
 every
day
, they can damage their health. Since ready-made
meals
 are often made in factories, we have no idea about the
supplements
 in ready-made
meals
, and how they are made. Companies add some different chemicals/
supplements
 to make the
food
 tastier
therefore
this
food
 can contain unhealthy
supplements
 which cause cancer or diseases. Another drawback is the weight problem.
People
 who eat ready-made
meals
 gain/put on weight
day
 by
day
.
For example
, most of the
people
 who live in the U.S have obesity which is mainly caused by convenient
food
. There are
also
 some advantages of convenient
food
. Primarily, ready-made
food
 doesn't take time for the busy
people
 of modern life. They can eat fastly
then
 they can turn back to their work. Another advantage is that when we are outside, we can reach
this
food
 easily.
Also
,
although
 some of those foods contain really innocent
supplements
, we still have to know where they cook or how they cook
this
food
. In conclusion, ready-made
meals
 facilitate our life in some situations. And those are really delicious foods but those have a lot of negative effects on us. If we can't control how many times we eat it in our daily life, it can affect our health badly. Cooking for ourselves is safer than read-made
meals
. At least, we know the ingredients.
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