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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Dicuss both of these views and give you opinion

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Many
people
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 think
advertisement
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 is successful on persuaded
people
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 to purchase
objects
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 while other
people
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 say they no longer pay attention
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advertisement
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 since it is too ordinary. Both of these vies will be discussed in the
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 following paragraphs. To start, the advertising is very successful
on
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 appealing to many shoppers interest. The persuasion for customers
attract
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 by advertising since the information on the
objects
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 are provided. The example
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such
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as the
first
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 choice that most
of
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makeup
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 shoppers would do is to look at the reviews(one type of
advertisement
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) before they buy it because they can see the result before they try on the skin.
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 is why promoting or advertising is one of the popular ways of persuading customers since nowadays it is very successful in increasing the number of shoppers.
On the other hand
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, the ordinary of promoting make
people
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 lose attention on them. Today, advertisements are encased everyone because they can be seen
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every 5 minutes on the internet. To illustrate, when we use the railway, the advertisements are shown all the way to the end which make
people
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 at the stage of boredom of it. Though, the belief of
objects
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 by advertising is depreciated in the past few years since there are many fake reviews that
people
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 tended to not believe
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anymore. In conclusion, the
advertisement
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 might help to promote though these days
people
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 do not believe it as much as before because of fake reviews. In my opinion, I think it is vital to have advertising because the benefits of that
objects
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 can be seen by that though it should be honest and truthful.
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