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‘All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school.’ How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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It is believed that
children
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language
 as they start school or as possible
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early
age
. I personally disagree with the statement, since there are other lessons which are more important than a foreign
language
. The following paragraphs will explain some of the reasons in more detail.
Firstly
,
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 process is a long journey for
children
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. At their
age
, learning the alphabetical words, pronunciation, grammar, and
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 take much time and effort. Nowadays, some parents
are started
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 their
children
’s formal education at an early
age
such
 as at the
age
 of three or four. During these periods,
children
 are in the process of learning their mother tongue
language
. They are still learning new
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of
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 their native languages. If the
children
 are
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taught a new
language
,
then
 there is a risk that the
children
 might get mixed up or confused.
As well as
,
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 they should attend subjects like arts and
sport
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. Art is an essential subject for
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children
 as it teaches them about
creativities
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,
while
 sports are
also
 vital for the development of
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children
’s physical appearance.
Besides
 that, it is
also
 important to teach the
children
 about numbers and physics as well, as it is beneficial for their future life. Admittedly, I agree with those who argue that learning
foreign
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language
 is a great beneficial skill for their
children
 these days.
However
, early-aged
children
 should focus on learning other important things,
besides
 a new
language
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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