Some people believe that the government should spend more money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues in cities to make them better places to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art

creations can definitely provide an individual

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perception of beauty

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if it is always at their sight.

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comes into thinking that it should be placed in a

city

to make it better for living.

However

, I disagree with

this

idea which I will explain in

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essay. There are those who insist that the imposition of painting and artistic sculptures makes a

city

fascinating and inhabitable.

This

can be for the reason that

art

can be eye-

cathcing

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catching

can somehow provide

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positive energy to those who

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it.

However

, the beauty of the

city

doe not completely rely on its superficial attractions and not many citizens find

this

art

significant to their lives.

Therefore

, government allocation for

this

proposal may lead to

waste

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of money,

instead

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money should be reserved for the benefit of the

society

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health and education sector are good examples. Another point to consider is that I believe that money should be spent on the sectors that will favour the

society

directly and not on the beautification of the

city

is because it is more essential to allocate on the education of the people

such

as upgrading the technological materials used for teaching, providing enough learning tools for the learners and enough funds for educational activities to aid both teachers and students

instead

of budgeting for the beautification of the

city

through artistic skills.

As a result

, individuals will grow into a more educated and knowledgeable

person

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,

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attributes of an individual may contribute to the well being of a person and

consequently

provide a harmonious community that makes a place fit to live in. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that instilling

art

can turn a

city

into a good living condition.

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funds for the

bettement

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betterment

of

the

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society

such

as spending more on

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education can make a better

society

as educated individuals make up an inhabitable environment.