many people like to go on holiday abroad,while others believe it is better to visit places within their own country. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Certain individuals are of the opinion of spending their break period in a foreign agrarian
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some set of people enjoys staying back in their homey in other to explore exciting site around them.
This
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essay will agree with having vacation spent abroad as my opinion because it gives
oppourtiunity
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opportunity
for relaxation and enjoyment and
also
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it adds to
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knowledge
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. Meanwhile, both views will be discussed with explanations and relevant examples.
Firstly
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, using
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free
periods
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in a familiar environment gives room for more exploitation and conserve money in that person will be able to view as many
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as he or she can at a very low cost compared to the bill of going outside the
provincial
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.The time one will spend
in
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planning to travel abroad would have been used to hit some other zone around.
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, during the festive period,
i
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I
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had a huge time for myself to stopover at various
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that
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have
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not been to in my neighbourhood with little
charges
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and
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, made me
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able to have fun in different amusement
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. On
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other hand,
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it might be expensive
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holidays spent in a foreign agrarian I think it
worth
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it since it will enable someone to have
knowledge
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of different cultures apart from that of his agrarian and
also
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, gives room for relaxation and enjoyment since there is nothing to distract or disturb individual from having enough fun.A typical example was my husband"
s
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's
experience when he had his annual leave spent abroad
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previous year,no one
to
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called him for emergency surgery as his mobile line was not reachable and he explained
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types of food delicacies he ate when he was away.He
also
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talked about the various modes of dressing he saw in the homey he went to.Assuming he had not gone outside the
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,he might not have had
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additional
knowledge
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. In summary,vacation is best spent outside the bucolic for advanced
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,though it may be expensive and weekends can be used to interview interesting
region
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regions
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around one environment since it's less time and
money consuming
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money-consuming
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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