More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

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consumption
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drinks
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to get out from the day to day work stress many people starts to go for outing with their friends
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evening to various eateries
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their menu most of them only
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their customers .
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, when we turn the television we can clearly figure out
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drinks
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see any single advertisement with regard to the non or
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level
sugar
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influence the human brain to
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drinks
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it leads to
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unhealthy teenage in near future.
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that I am not going to drink or reduce
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either by paying
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higher amount to
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drinks
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it is clear that cant
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as a human
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we have to take certain control
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to our
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