Advertising is all around us, it's an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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you can see many advertisings
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some items that you might like or dislike. Most
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because they want to be more successful in their business. There are some advantages of advertising.
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one advantage is that advertising could help
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for
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companies
that want to find more customers that will be interested
in
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to
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buying their products.
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customers, because on advertisements are usually showed where to find the products. Another advantage is that your company will be more profitable if you promote what you sell. Of
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there are many disadvantages. Those
companies
that want to promote their product will need to pay for the advertisements, but not every company have enough money to do that. Another disadvantage is that many people can be annoyed by those advertisements and decide to not buy their products. So, in
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I would like to say that too many advertisings could be bad for everyone. For the company and for the customers.
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would be annoyed and
companies
would just lose their money.
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