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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
people
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 often discuss whether learning a foreign
language
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 is only aimed at working or studying abroad. Both views have their own explanations, but in my opinion, there are various reasons to study a foreign
language
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. On the one hand, it is true that most
people
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 learn English as a
second
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language
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 in order to study or work abroad.
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, students taking English lessons to prepare for
language
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 tests as the premise to go to college in another country. In many international corporations, employees may have to travel internationally to attend conferences or events, they need to fluently communicate with
people
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 from other parts of the world, so learning new languages are essential for them.
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, many individuals are not intended to make trips to another country; so they may not motivated to learn different languages.
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, despite
of
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the fact that some
people
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 learn a foreign
language
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 only because they have needs to travel to
foreign
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a foreign
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 country. Learning
new
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language
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 could
benefits
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 us in other ways.
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,
language
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 represents a certain culture and history, we could learn traditions and norms by learning that
language
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.
Second
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, bilingual or even trilingual are more competitive than
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 only one
language
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 in today’s y job market.
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, a person who can speak both Cantonese and English seeking for bank custom service job in Canada are more likely to be recruited, because she or he could serve
varies
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 groups of customers.
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, with knowing a foreign langue, we can better make friends internationally and travel to anywhere without
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language
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the language
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 barrier，which greatly facilitates our life. To sum up, learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 could benefit us in different ways. We should
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 the importance of learning
new
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a new
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language
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 is not only
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 at
traveling
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 abroad, but
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enrich
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 our knowledge and
expand
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 our social cycle.
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