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today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert or the antartic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for touristic who visit places?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are travelling to different
locations
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 where
conditions
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 are hard, like a desert or the antarctic. In fact, there are some advantages to visiting difficult
conditions
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places
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,
on the other hand
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, these
places
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 have some drawbacks. In
this
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 essay, I would like to explain the good sides and bad sides of these
places
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.
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 of all, most
of
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people
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the people
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 want to
travel
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 to difficult
conditions
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places
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 because there are a lot of benefits for travelling to these
places
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.
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, because
people
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 want to get more experience of adventure, they are travelling
places
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 where situations are hard.
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, if we compare
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difficult
places
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 and normal
places
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,
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 when
people
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 visit
to
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difficult
locations
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 they can get more adventure experience.
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,
people
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 would like to see amazing natural
locations
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such
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 as deserts or the antarctic.
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, most
of
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people
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the people
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 say that when they visit
the
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amazing natural
places
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,
this
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 trip will be more attractive than others.
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,
although
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 there are some benefits to visiting these grounds, these
places
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 have some disadvantages. In naturally, humans prefer to stay
good
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in good
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conditions
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locations
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.
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, they want to take perfect healthy and food services and
that is
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 why when they
travel
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 to difficult
places
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, they feel anxious and unhappy.
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, Transportation options are very less for
travel
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 these
places
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.
For instance
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, when
people
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 want to
travel
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 to
antarctic
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the antarctic
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, they can just go to
the
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this
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 place by plane and they can not use
ship
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a ship
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 or car so that they do not have a
lot
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oflot
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 choices for
travel
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 to
this
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 place. In conclusion,
people
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 have a lot of reasons for why they want to
travel
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 to difficult
places
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. I think that there are some advantages and disadvantages to travelling to
locations
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 where
conditions
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 are hard.
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