In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Childhood is one of the most precious and crucial
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of human life whereby generating good behaviour and mentality is more important. Resultantly, some people argued that
work
experience
provides
further
development
of
children
but others contended that it will badly
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their meaningful knowledge gathering and accepting responsibilities. In
this
essay, I will explain both views with relevant examples.
To begin
, there are plenty of psychological theories available in our education system in which most of the theorists and scholars
against
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the
children
's
work
experience
.
Firstly
, other paid activities reduce students concentration on studies and it prevents their physical stability. To illustrate
this
, the Ministry of Social Welfare department in India point out that 65% of school dropout and child literacy are the results of child labour. To put it another way, in underdeveloped and developing countries
this
situation
exploited
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by many people for their profit-making
Secondly
it will negatively influence
children
's brain
development
because more physical activities need more nutrition but
majority
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of the
third
world countries cannot solve
this
issues due to poverty.
Thirdly
, more
work
reduce
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children
's involvement in extra-curricular activities because they will give importance to earning money.
However
, I strongly support
work
experience
for
children
because it enhances their positive attitude and brings more realisation in their life . For ,example in ,Japan all students need to do cleaning and food preparation for their school .Reportedly,it enhances understanding of good values in life and acceptance of others.
Besides
this
through paid
work
children
can understand how to save money and
importance
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of financial stability.Other things to remember, job oriented training stabilize self-
development
, proper learning mentality and self-worth.
Additionally
, the feelings like optimism,
trustworth
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and tolerance
consecutive
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through
work
experience
. To support
this
, According to child psychologist Jean Piaget suggested that
children
need more exploring space for their creative and mental growth. So adults should give them enough time and resources for their proper
development
. In conclusion, there is a saying 'a bird without wings'
similarly
every person need proper
experience
for their future
development
.
Furthermore
, whoever takes responsibility
of
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children
make sure that these minors - get enough opportunity for
further
growth.
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