The two maps give information about the change of Happy Valley Shopping Centre from 1982 to 2012.

The two maps give information about the change of Happy Valley Shopping Centre from 1982 to 2012.
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The two maps give information about the change
of
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in
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Happy Valley Shopping Centre from 1982 to 2012. In the bottom left corner of the map
was
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were
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trees and the entrance to the lobby
area
was cleared to make way for a parking lot. The lake was recovered by trees was replaced by
the
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furniture retail. The coffee shop on the left shopping
area
was knocked-down,
the
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and the
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food
store
was nearby
similarly
, to building a sports
store
and electronics
store
with a larger
store
. The most noticeable was that themed restaurants have been constructed near the
area
entertainment
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of entertainment
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. Over the past 30 years, the position of
the
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furniture was substituted by a food
store
.
Finally
, the toilets and four elevators on the left-hand map have been
stay
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staying
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constant.
Overall
, the Shopping Central experienced
the
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a
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number of dramatic changes with the
area
were
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was
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expanded.
However
, the entertainment
area
in the middle position has been kept stable.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, store with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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