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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#celebrities #glamour #wealth #achievements #adolescents
It is argued that most
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celebrities
 are known for their luxurious lifestyle than for
perfomance
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performance
 or talents these days. Some people feel that it is a bad example for the young generation. In my opinion, I completely agree with ideas it useful impacts on youngsters. Today, there are several famous
celebrities
 and actors who are extremely popular
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 their extravagant lifestyle,
instead
 of their developing skills of performances. Their acting talent might be standard or below the average, but they are making
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 to the public by showing their wealth and glamorous lifestyle.
On the other hand
, there are some
celebrities
 who can be
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positive role
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 for young adults. They have reached success due to strong determination and hard work, and the public
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 them for their masterpiece of arts and great achievements. Actors, musicians and
sport
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 stars become famous idols because they worked hard and applied themselves to develop real skills and abilities. They
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 great effort, determination and ambition, which is required for someone who wants successful in the future. In conclusion, I think that famous
celebrities
 have a positive impact on everyone, especially
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 generation.
However
, parents need to have the right education orientation fỏ their children.
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