Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In our contemporary society, getting a
university
education
is been the best
way
to become successful in
life
. But some
people
disagree about that.
This
essay will discuss
my
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both these views and give my opinion.
First
of all,
people
who study in
university
had knowledge about their major.
University
education
takes them about 4-5
year
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to complete the major, so they will take a lot of time to research about that.
For example
, research by Queen
University
in 2010 showed that many high school student studies for the final test to graduate from
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high school, which depend on their mark
to
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admission to the school. We can be clearly seen
that
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the importance of getting a
university
education
.
On the other hand
,
people
who did not
a
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university
students
still
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are still
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successful
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in
life
.
Instead
, they will have
life
experiences
such
as presentation skills, communication skills, and marketing skills.
For instance
, in my family,
people
who were born in
’70s
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usually do not study at
university
, but now they are still successful
people
in various fields and
also
provide their family and their children a good
life
. So, getting a
university
is not the only
way
to succeed in
life
. In conclusion, I think getting a
university
education
can not be decided human’s
life
. To become successful in
life
, we need to choose a
way
which
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is suitable for our decision.
Additionally
, learning a new language
such
as English, Japanese, and Chinese is
also
a good
way
to have a good job and success in
life
.
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