Many people think that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits of living in the cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A considerable proportion of individuals hold the perspective in rural areas as compared to
cities
;
however
, others
contadict
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contradict
this
view.
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essay will highlight both opinions in upcoming paragraphs. Explaining the reasons
that
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why
people
argue that life is
more
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healthier in villages. The primary reason is
unpolluted
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the unpolluted
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enviroment
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environment
of
countryside
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the countryside
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. Admittedly, since the lack of industries and factories in rural regions, there
is
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are
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less
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fewer
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toxic
subatances
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substances
present
is
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in
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air and water.
As a result
, the air and water quality of undeveloped
region
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regions
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is totally appropriate for living.
For instance
, according to a survey conducted by WHO, the level of air
pollutant
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pollutants
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such
as nitroxide is escalating in
cities
. Needless to say, villagers can enjoy food items
such
as fruits and vegetables because
in
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,in
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rural areas,
people
cultivate these kinds of
nutritous
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nutritious
food items in their farms. There is no doubt,
people
become physically fit by staying in urban areas.
Firstly
, urban
people
not only have access to massive parks
,
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but
also
gyms equipped with exercise
equipments
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equipment
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pieces of equipment
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.
Therefore
,
people
of
cities
can easily take advantage of these facilities to become fit. Not to mention, the health
professionls
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professionals
in
cities
can help
people
by providing
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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regarding
healthy
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a healthy
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diet , proper exercises which in
turns
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make
people
more healthy and fit. In conclusion, it can be re-iterated from
above
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discussion ,
although
living in
countryside
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the countryside
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has many benefits
such
as
pollution free
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pollution-free
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enviroment
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environment
, the amenities namely gyms in
cities
also
encourage
people
to perform physical activities.
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