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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The supplied bar chart reflects the information on the
oil
production
 in OPEC and non-OPEC
countries
 per day in units of million barrels over the research period from 1980 to 2020. According to the graph, we can observe that Non-OPEC
countries
 were dominant in the
production
 of the world’s
oil
 during the two
last
 decades at the end of the 20th century. A more detailed look affords to conclude that Non-OPEC
countries
 produced just over 10 million barrels daily at that time.
However
, a tendency has been embarking to change since the 2000s. It can be spotted an appearance of other OPEC
countries
, which start to participate in the
oil
production
.
Moreover
, OPEC
countries
 from the Middle East has increased significantly their figures on
oil
production
 by twice approximately throughout the
first
 decade of the 21st century.
Nevertheless
,
such
 a surge in figures has not incurred changes and ,
conversely
, the total of the
oil
production
 in the Middle East continued to rise and overcame slightly more than 15 million barrels per day during the
last
 decade of the research period. Ultimately, over the conducted research it can be inferred that world
countries
 have been increasing the
oil
production
 since 1980.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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