Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that getting a

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education is the most essential key to becoming successful in

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.

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, the counterparts disagree with

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no longer

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at present. From my point of view, I would go with the latter view as I think a

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admission is not all that people should give in their lives, but it is the effort in doing something that will lead them to what they want. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, it is true that most people in society prefer to enrol in a

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. First of all, other than getting a degree certificate, they believe that a

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is the best place for them to gain some skills and wisdom

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as communication and management skills, and theoretical knowledge.

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, they think that enrolling in a

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would heighten

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their educational backgrounds

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more opportunities to be hired

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a better job position. To exemplify

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, there was a piece of news reported that more than 70% of the employees working as managers in different types of companies have completed a

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or at least 4 years of

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without taking a gap year. It can be said that the qualifications from universities lead to a better spot in society.

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, they create a pathway to a successful

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.

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, I reckon a

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is not everything in

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lives. It can not determine the values of humans nor the quality of

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, especially whether a person will be achieving their

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's goals or not. I would say that passion, effort, and experiences are what lead the public to success ,not a degree certificate. Having a higher educational background does not mean a person will accomplish their goals.

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, Wownam,

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of the richest and successful entrepreneurs in Thailand. She was able to earn 100,000,000 baht from selling her own beauty products

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the age of 20.

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, she did not attend a

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but took

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times

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to gain

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in getting herself involved in a business until she decided to make her own brand, which is still the talk of the town today. Her brand impressed and at the same time amazed society as she has not taken any

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university's

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courses.

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, having no high qualification from an educational institution does not mean a person will be facing a failure in

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. In conclusion,

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there are numerous benefits

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achieving academic degrees from universities, I would still say that the most crucial part of being successful is to give

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our best in everything we do.

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is why I opine that the advantages of having passion and inserting a lot of effort

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clearly

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the benefits of having a

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education.