A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Over the
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decades, a system of values has completely changed. Namely, these days, some well-respected virtues from the past are worthless and others, more materialistic, characteristics started to matter. In
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I firmly believe that society today has
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distorted
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view of values. The main reason for
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is laying in the roots of the internet, more precisely the social media. With
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social media, people started relying more and more on their superficial
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characteristics
, since they are the only ones that we can notice at
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, society began making
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based on what can be seen from
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.
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, the deeper virtues, including kindness, trust, politeness and respect lost their meaning. The other reason for
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is the way that parents nurture their children. Because
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they care so much for them, parents want to prevent their children from getting hurt, oftentimes by
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encouraging
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in empathy and kindness and
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in selfishness.
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old-fashioned virtues are fading away and individuals are starting to put themselves
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first
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place. To sum up, I believe that
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world is full of
narcisstic
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narcissistic
people, owing to both, internet and parents, which led to
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of traditional traits.
Nevertheless
, I honestly believe that society will gradually change its' system of values, hopefully in the near future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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