Today we review Quna's birthday. sumerise his first birthday and new year

Quan had a great
first
birthday at Rabbit Patch and at home. It was many hugs and gifts that he received from
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his parent's
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parent's
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parents'
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friends. He travelled to Lake Tekapo, Kaikoura where he could see the ocean for the
first
time
of
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in
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his life; the big waves scared him a little bit though. On the
first
days of 2022, he went to New Brighton beach near home and enjoyed the sea longer; he enjoyed playing the soft sand for a long time there. At
this
time he has already had 10 teeth, and there are 2 cheek teeth coming up as well. He can use the walker professionally by himself, sometimes he enjoys walking with two
hand
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hands
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holding his parents' hands. His laughing brings lots of joy to people
surround
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him.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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