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what are the advantages and disadvantages of having a car?

#car
People often use
cars
 as means of transportation.
This
 can be very useful, because owning a
car
 helps you move around much faster
,
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 than by public transport or on foot.
However
, there are some minuses of having a
car
.
For example
,
cars
 usually emit harmful vehicle exhaust fumes and those fumes, which pollute the air that we
breath
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. Another minus is that
cars
 use petrol which is not very cheap. You always need to fill your petrol tank, if you want to drive.
Also
, the
car
 needs to be taken to be services or
repaired
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, which can be expensive. Owning a
car
 can be advantageous. If you own a
car
, you always have the chance to get from place to place, and it will be significantly faster than going by public transport. Another advantage could be that electric
cars
 are better for the environment and are
also
 very quiet and smooth
drive
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. So, in
conclusion
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 I would say that in spite of some disadvantages, owning a
car
 will help you in your daily life.
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