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Some people think that teacher should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and what is wrong so that they can behave. Others say that teacher should only teach student academic subjects. Discuss both view with your own opinion?

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 and points of views 2 result-oriented Support 1 It is often argued that
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 should only be teaching knowledge from the books and subjects. In
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 are usually built during their growth. As one of the most important
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 age,
teachers
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 have the responsibilities to share and transfer the ability of
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, school bullying is not the right thing to do, while
students
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 should be nice to all kinds of
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, giving a positive value and appropriate
behaviour
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 It is often argued that
teachers
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 should be
transportation
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the transportation
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 of
values
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 in
judgement
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 on human
behaviour
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 while some
people
Use synonyms
 agree that
teachers
Use synonyms
 should only be teaching knowledge from the books and subjects. In
this
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 essay, both of the views will be discussed and followed by my point of view. Children's
values
Use synonyms
 are usually built during their growth. As one of the most important
people
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 of
this
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 age,
teachers
Use synonyms
 have the responsibilities to share and transfer the ability of
judgement
Use synonyms
 to
students
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,
for example
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, school bullying is not the right thing to do, while
students
Use synonyms
 should be nice to all kinds of
people
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.
Also
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, giving a positive value and appropriate
behaviour
Use synonyms
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