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More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number…) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#people #information #address #telephone #number… #activities #networks #purposes #development
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Nowadays
internet
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the internet
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 is doing
vital
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a vital
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 role in peoples’ daily life
routine
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routines
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. As a
practise
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, most
of
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the
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apply
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online
users
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 or social network
users
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 are used to
enter
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 their personal details in social networking sites as well as internet banking portals.
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 habit has produced numerous advantages to the
users
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 and there
are
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certain
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 number of drawbacks. The primary advantage of
storage
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 personal
data
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 into a device
,
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 will
be avoid
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avoid
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 repetitive entering
data
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, whenever using the particular network. As per the current globalized world,
time
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 is money, since
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 kind of storage will definitely save
the
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 considerable amount of
time
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.
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 , most
of
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the
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apply
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people are engaging with various
kind
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kinds
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 of applications, especially for
ecommerce
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eCommerce
e-commerce
 platforms for their
day today
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day-today
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 requirements. As examples of, payments in supermarkets, restaurants, payments for utility bills and online transferring, procedures can be made convenient and
time
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 saver by personal
data
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 storage. Despite,
this
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 type of personal
data
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 saving in web portals or social networking sites are not completely safe. According to recent news and reliable information, concealing personal
data
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, which has
saved
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 in social media logins, are reasonably difficult
from
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for
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data
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 hackers.
The professional
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Professional
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 hackers can easily enter to personal information of other
individual
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individuals
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 and they can manipulate them in fraudulent activities or criminal circumstances. In conclusion, entering and personal
data
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 in online platforms, undoubtedly save
users
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time
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 and make the daily lifestyle to
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 level. But there are considerable disadvantages of
data
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 leaking, which can be
threat
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a threat
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, to individuals as well
economy
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the economy
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. In my opinion, authorities need to take necessary legitimate actions to protect personal
data
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 in public portals to avoid criminal offences.
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