it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. Tp what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children

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we learned basic or the fundamental habitats which are related to the different

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