In some countries owning a home rather than writing one is very important for people. What might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Nowadays most people are choosing
owning
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their own
house
or apartment as
really
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essential part in living
then
renting them in some countries. I fully agree with these beliefs and give some
proofs
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below.
Firstly
, the main reason that the citizens choose having own
house
due to it is reliability that they have permanent locations to live. Because
of
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nobody can
not
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make them go away while they can not pay for the
rent
on time. The
second
reasonable cause
are
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owning passive properties
such
as
this
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houses, apartments or just office buildings , it is obvious that they would not decrease their prices,
instead
always shows the recognizable prices year by year.
This
happening proves that if
person
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a person
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owns
such
as
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passive things they always
be
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in the winning positions, no matter what.
In addition
, people who own their own living locations
they
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will not pay any
rent
bills,
as a
result
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it comes to saving more extra money and if possible investigating or just putting it
to
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their bank accounts.
For instance
, according to my own experience in living in a rented
house
with my family, it was difficult to manage with
rent
bills, that the
rent
was incredible high to us and the renter was
also
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an anxious
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person. In my opinion, having your own possessions no matter what, it can be your car, office or
house
it should be owned by ourselves in order to be safe in our living and of course to our pocket as well and in all countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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