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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people argue that helping the
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 should use money or other help from rich
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 or developed
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. From my perspective, giving alternative help to poorer
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 is better than financial help. To support my point of view, I will discuss two major aspects of
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 which were much practical help by developed
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 with other methods.
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, I strongly believe that, with similar experience from developed
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,
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 as national financial insufficiency from poorer
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 can be fixed.
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 financial insufficiency is mainly caused by the weak economic structure which is supported by their natural or human-made
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.
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, many natural
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, fossil fuel and tidy power can be explored to become trading products to exchange money and other types of valuable
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 to support the country’s development. While those developed
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 can assist poorer
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 based on the experience of
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 exploration and related field education to build up their own technical team to utilize their
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.
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, I
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 firmly believe that developed
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 can help with the infrastructure development in
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-world
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 to improve
poverty
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. Without a dynamic development plan, those poorer
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 always suffer from supplement shortages. The experience from developed
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 can help to make strategies for the life-related areas
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 as transportation to advance the city’s mobility and regional accessibility without geological barriers. The high-speed road and railway system are being established,
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 allows good trade national-wide and provides job opportunities which could allow citizens to earn money from
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 construction. Eventually, the reduction of shortage can help those poorer
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 get rid of
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. These are barely processed by financial aid but with practical help. In summary, I agree that the support with approachable methods from developed
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 to solve
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 is much practical. I do not think it is possible that all sorts of
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 could tackle by financial aid from rich
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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