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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurant. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side your favor.

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Some countries agree that have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings.
However
, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
also
 be against the idea. In the following paragraphs, I shall put both sides of the argument. On the one hand, opponent countries against
such
law
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laws
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 cite that they are solely dependent on importing and exporting tobacco products and that would have
significant
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 impact on their economic system.
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,
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, there are the costs of creating and maintaining smoking areas, potential lost productivity
due to
 increased smoking breaks for smoking employees, and the loss of business from customers who smoke.,
However
, banning smoking in public places is one way to reduce both
overall
 smoking rates and exposure to second-hand smoke. Researchers find that smoking bans can reduce the number of heart attacks by as much as 26
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 per year.  If it were not harmful to health there would be no reason to control its use. Ireland was the first country to ban indoor smoking in all public places, back in 2004, and many other countries and regions have since done so. Today, most country and territory bans smoking in enclosed public places. Making public spaces smoke-free reduces secondhand smoke exposure and has a long list of benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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