Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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are making new roles and it causing few serious problems, some people believe that
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teachers are the main person who can make better roles.
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, others think that the main role of
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on patients hard. In my
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they both have vital Role but Patients have to
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active. I will elaborate
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with relevant examples. On the one hand, a teacher can provide students
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knowledge and make them active.
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, there is a
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where they admit those students who
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bad in
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and do not follow the roles. The teachers of
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make them understand, the benefits of
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discipline
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. The teachers make students good in practical knowledge to Practice frequently by the
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teacher
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role
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discipline
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need to be more
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concern
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about
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at home.
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, Patients can ensure their
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's healthy and happy life. Most of the time of
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day
children
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stay home, so
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have
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responsiblity
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responsibility
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their
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child
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children
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. To illustrate, My nephew was addicted
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modern technology
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as
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,
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Befor
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Before
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night in class
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he played mobile
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untill
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until
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he could not attend his
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on time.
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he fail the
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and he had to wait 1 year to attend the
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again, if his
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were
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about him well it may
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not
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happen
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his life. In
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modern civilization lot's of
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children
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can show interest but
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have to
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concern
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about their
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. To sum up, a teacher can force
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to follow
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during
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school
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time, but after
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parents
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are responsible for
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their
child
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have to
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concern
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about their
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activities more
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then
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a teacher
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teacher
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