Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Improving
people
health
is
vital
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concern for both
government
and individuals.
Although
there are many
people
who think building more and more public healthcare by
government
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the government
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can be a prominent way to taking
cares
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care
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of peoples
health
;
however
,I personally think that
,
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apply
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eating fresh food and daily exercise is the best way to be healthier. On one hand,
government
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the government
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can allocate money to building hospitals to ensure
people
’s
health
.
People
are dying due to
lack
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a lack
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of medical services in many underdeveloped countries. So if
government
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the government
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built public
health
care
peoples
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people
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can easily get any kind of medical services.
As a result
,
people
will not die for lack of medical services.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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also
can arrange free medical
camp
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camps
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to aware
people
about how to be healthy, and
also
can give free medical
checkup
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checkups
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as well as
frer
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free
for
medicine. To sum up,
government
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the government
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role is wide when it
is comes
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to public
health
. To take care of citizen
health
making
hospital
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hospitals
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, free medical camp is a good initiative for
government
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the government
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.
On the other hand
, individuals can take care of their own
health
by doing
many
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any
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kind
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kinds
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of activities.
Firstly
, they can do daily exercise, and
this
will keep them fit;
as a result
,they won't get sick.
Secondly
, there
are
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wider choice availability of fresh food in the market
instead
of taking fast food they can choose those. It will definitely help them to
more
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healthier. So, I can say, if we not
to
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too
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sick so we do not need to go
hospitals
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to hospitals
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although
their will have some serious issues for we will go for them. To conclude,
although
government
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the government
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can
takes
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some steps to make
sure
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a sure
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healthy life for its citizen,individuals can do more
then
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to keep fit by themself to doing activities.
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