Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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health

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concern for both

government

and individuals.

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there are many

people

who think building more and more public healthcare by

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can be a prominent way to taking

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of peoples

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eating fresh food and daily exercise is the best way to be healthier. On one hand,

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can allocate money to building hospitals to ensure

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health

People

are dying due to

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of medical services in many underdeveloped countries. So if

government

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built public

health

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can easily get any kind of medical services.

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people

will not die for lack of medical services.

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government

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people

about how to be healthy, and

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free

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medicine. To sum up,

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to public

health

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making

hospital

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, free medical camp is a good initiative for

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, individuals can take care of their own

health

by doing

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of activities.

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, they can do daily exercise, and

this

will keep them fit;

as a result

,they won't get sick.

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wider choice availability of fresh food in the market

instead

of taking fast food they can choose those. It will definitely help them to

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healthier. So, I can say, if we not

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sick so we do not need to go

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although

their will have some serious issues for we will go for them. To conclude,

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some steps to make

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healthy life for its citizen,individuals can do more

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to keep fit by themself to doing activities.

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