The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981,1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981,1991 and 2001.
The given pie charts demonstrate expenditure changes in United Kingdom schools in 5 different categories namely, insurance,
teacher's
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teachers'
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salaries, furniture and equipment, resources and other
worker's
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workers'
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salaries over the
20_year
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20-year
period. From an
overall
perspective,a huge amount of
budget
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the budget
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accounted for teachers' wages during 20 years,
moreover
,the least
sums
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sum
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of money
spent
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was spent
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for
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on
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insurance. First of all,all three surveyed years illustrate that
teacher
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teachers
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and other workers' payments had the biggest proportion between 1981 and 2001.Schools spent between 40% and 50% of
its
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their
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funds
for
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on
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tutors.
Besides
that,in 1981 28% of schools' prices
utilized
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were utilized
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for
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by
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other employees and
also
22% and 15% in 1991 and 2001 respectively.
On the other hand
, investment
on
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in
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resources, furniture and equipment
take
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takes
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the
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apply
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third
place.It is interesting to note that between 5% and 23% for
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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.
Finally
, the proportion of findings which is used for insurance had the least amount among all sections.It started at 2% and
at the
end
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,end
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it rose
up
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apply
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to 8%.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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