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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the possible solutions?

#people #home
It is argued that
people
 don't feel safe at their properties and on the outside.
This
 is because of the rising number of committed violence or lack of care in adapting the households in a proper way. Nowadays,
people
 tend to feel less safe around their households due to the constantly growing number of home invasions.
This
 is because of existing poverty disadvantages
or
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of
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 different social statuses.
For Instance
, in my
family
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,family
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 no one has installed a
security
 system due to lack of money. The solution for it might be the special government welfare which would cover some of the installation costs. With that in
mind
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 we should put more pressure as a community
to
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on
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 the welfare administrations.
Secondly
, sort of the society
do
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 not pay enough attention to adapt their homes to be more secure.
This
 is because of not caring about the
security
 issues.
For Instance
, famous American rapper Pop Smoke has been found killed and burgled in his Los Angeles mansion after sharing his location on social media accidentally. Later on, the prosecutor said that his mansion has been adapted in a bad way. That's why it is very crucial to focus on your personal
security
 at
first
, even if you are becoming rich and wealthy. To Summarise,
people
 tend to feel less secure at home or when they are out. It's caused by existing violence around and
people
 don't pay attention to the
security
 issues. To solve
this
 problem we have to put more pressure on the government for the development of new welfare projects which will help
people
 to secure their households.
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