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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death, Throughout the world today.In the interest of the public health,governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products.Do you agree or disagree?

#illness #death #world #interest #health #governments #ban #cigarettes #tobacco #products
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 past,these days smoking has great influence and
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major issue between the perks.
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,some people tend to know that it would be a negative impact
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 their health.According to contemporary
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tobacco should be banned by the authorities for the well-being of
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 drawbacks are
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 cause of drug addiction
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through out
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 each and every age ,even if it is young age children.
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 of nicotine can make people
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 and die for
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 drug.
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society
.For an
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 youths tend to do peer smoking as
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enjoyment
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 what they do not know is their addiction towards smoking,which they feel
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 possible at all.
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deterioration of public health ,
society
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 diseases in the community as
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cancer,Heart blockage as well as mental retardation.As an example, in
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society
 more than 50% of people,including men and women right now entailed with daily tobacco intake perhaps they just could not get rid of the obsession due to lack of influence of families and authorities. To conclude,I reaffirm my position that specific authorities must ban the tobacco products that are highly remarkable in the market or at least they should try to put up with new rules and regulations about the usage of
this
 kind of drug even for the future generation.
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