Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news events. Do you think advantage of technology outweigh the disadvantages

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number of the public utilise online websites
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with friends and some others use the Internet to know more about current announcements.
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how social media fills the gap in
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relatives. People are now in a technological period where distance does not matter for sending digital information
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broadcasting is helping countries to reach almost all nations in the world if they want to provide urgent messages. Apps like
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are now a basic need for any smartphone user, through which connecting to other people from any place is now simple.
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services like youtube
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to
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story
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on their live channels.
Although
advancement has brought changes in daily life,
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. The main problem of technology is there is no one to control things happening on the internet
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since tracking of information
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as age, location, education and interest of individuals are now done by new generations phones and cookies on websites customers visit. The spread of fake news is now a major concern as it can harm not only the victim of it but the entire circle of his or her friends. By considering
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information,
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the Internet can sometimes be harmful,
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modernization can provide a better standard of living for humans. Easy connectivity can save
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of time and energy and
thus
advantages of technology are considerably more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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