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Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that caring out all types of wild species are extremely essential by some sort of community, while others think protecting only some of them are more important.
This
 essay will discuss both given views and give my own opinion below as well. On the one hand, it is incredibly important looking after the whole types of animals which live in the wild nature. Because, as we all know, our valuable nature was made like a chain with these animals,
thus
, it means that the world is absolutely connected through them.
For instance
, if all sorts of snakes disappear fully, it will be really big issues related to
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drugs and other medicines. Because
,
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 lots of useful drugs to the common diseases are taken from poisons of these creatures.
In addition
, beasts are not only extremely helpful with producing drugs but
also
 really beneficial
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 our beautiful nature.
As a result
, it can be
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 in
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 of bees, they take some things from flowers and trees
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each
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 and provide them with advantageous components that
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 them in order to grow.
On the other hand
, it is difficult caring about all creatures
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in the wild conditions. Because
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 the power of humanity has its limitations. So, giving them equal focuses, are
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 difficult issue than other problems. As a bright example, it can be giraffes
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located in South Africa had difficulties
to survive
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 due to the coronavirus while in that time populations all around the world were
also
 suffering from these viruses. So, it was hard to concentrate
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 them simultaneously.
In addition
, drought has
also
 decreased their particular numbers. In my opinion, giving concentration to all wild animals are too difficult,
thus
, humans should only give focus to creatures that are very helpful to humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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