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Most people believe money is very important consideration when choosing a job as it can help you a better lifestyle. However there are some who believe it is more important to have a job you enjoy and that this and not money will lead to greater happiness and a more balanced personal life. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Having an alluring remuneration of the package is pivotal for everyone
therefore
 it is always an argumentative topic to weigh between a handsome package and
job
 satisfaction among a myriad of people. While money is fulfilling human beings ' all
desire
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desires
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 yet
work
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work-life
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life
 balance is significant to lead a smooth
life
.
Job
 satisfaction is vital for those who are quite settled and gained much in their career and
this
 aids them in creating a new pathway for entrepreneurship. To
sight
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 an example a 45 years old man who is in
IT
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the IT
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 industry has achieved the required position in a multi-level company with maximum wages obtained a personal work
life
 as well as strong financial status.
Additionally
, some people follow their passion and
instill
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 knowledge
those
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in those
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 who tremendously need it by offering training through
the
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various methods.
Therefore
,
such
 category people are always long for
job
 satisfaction.
Nonetheless
, earning enough dosh is required to have
stunning
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 lifestyle for themselves and their upcoming generation as well. If anyone has a good educational background in any realm,
then
 they have a higher chance to settle abroad with an attractive salary. Studies have found that 70% of Indians are immigrating to Canada every year to lead a peaceful and quality
life
.
Hence
 Money plays a lead role
which
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that
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bestow
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 a healthy lifestyle. In my view, money descends in
life
 though it
fulfills
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 a basic need.
However
, it is rather crucial at one point in time in
life
 to have a passionate dream
job
.
For instance
, my uncle is into IT. Having said that though, he is keen on stock marketing which he
want
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 to make a career in the later part of
life
.
Consequently
, he finds inner peace in it. To summarize,
although
 it requires to be financially strong to a large extent,
yet
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the
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a
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 satisfying
job
 is pivotal.
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