Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics or World cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Exercise
is an important part in
every human Change preposition
of
life
where it give
mental as well as physical fitness. Change the verb form
gives
However
, people
in their younger age doing a lot of exercise
either through their sports activities or through their school PT courses, but when start to grow they may engage into different element to carry out their Change to a plural noun
exercises
life
and often forgot to do exercise
as eariler
. In the current Correct your spelling
earlier
context
there is a mixed kind of Add a comma
,context
believe
exist in the society Replace the word
belief
with
regarding doing Change preposition
apply
exercise
, where few think that by
big Change preposition
apply
events
motivate people
to restart their workout
and on the other hand
by different factors can encourage them to do activities which give benefits
to body
.
Olympics and world cups conduct every four years with Add an article
the body
high
level of standard, where a lot of players take part after preparing for many years of hard work and later winners become as a Add an article
a high
the high
benchmake
or motivational factors for others. Correct your spelling
benchmark
Therefore
it is extermely
easy to encourage young adults to express the benefit Correct your spelling
extremely
those player
Change the determiner
that player
those players
getting
from doing regular Wrong verb form
get
exercise
in the respective game and moreover
social media starts to publish the success stories of those player
like how they have Change the determiner
that player
those players
prepare
themself to take part and win the crown, so Change the verb form
prepared
this
kind of events
automatically boosting the adults to restart their exercise
and encourage to achieve something in their life
. After the completion of those kind
of Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
event
we can observe their
are few Replace the word
there
people
starts
to rejoin the gym or run in the nearest park, Correct pronoun usage
who starts
this
indicates example
Correct article usage
an example
about
Change preposition
of
the
certain Correct article usage
apply
people
thought.
However
, those big events
will take place only in four years time period, but we have to take care about
our health, so by explaining the Change preposition
of
benefits
that drive though doing the exercise
, show case
the Correct your spelling
showcase
people
who are suffering from life
long illness
due to lack of Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
workout
and explain the other benefits
drive from exercise
we can encourage our friends or family members to start to do exercise
. Recent research paper
indicate that nearly 45% of total patients Fix the agreement mistake
papers
suffering
illness due to lack of Wrong verb form
suffer
exercise
.
Physcial
fitness is the main root cause for Correct your spelling
Physical
the
fitnessCorrect article usage
apply
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
we have to allocate proper time to do Correct your spelling
at least
at-least
some sort of Correct your spelling
at least
exercise
on a regular interval, however
, doing workout
on a regular basis is a diffcuties
taskCorrect your spelling
difficulties
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
my watching the motivation videos or programme people
can keep a track.Therefore
big event
like world cups and Fix the agreement mistake
events
olympics
reflect the real example in a live environmentChange the capitalization
Olympics
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
I strongly believe that those
Change the determiner
that event
those events
event
will encourage people
to restart their workout
to achieve the benefits
.
In conclusion, I brief saying that as a result
of big events
a lot of people
start to restart their exercise
to achieve the
their Remove the article
apply
life time
goals like Correct your spelling
lifetime
event
players and make their body and health in a fit manner.Submitted by y.jena2 on
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