Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics or World cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Exercise
is an important part
in
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every human
life
where it
give
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mental as well as physical fitness.
However
,
people
in their younger age doing a lot of
exercise
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either through their sports activities or through their school PT courses, but when start to grow they may engage into different element to carry out their
life
and often forgot to do
exercise
as
eariler
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earlier
. In the current
context
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there is a mixed kind of
believe
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exist in the society
with
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regarding doing
exercise
, where few think that
by
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big
events
motivate
people
to restart their
workout
and
on the other hand
by different factors can encourage them to do activities which give
benefits
to
body
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. Olympics and world cups conduct every four years with
high
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level of standard, where a lot of players take part after preparing for many years of hard work and later winners become as a
benchmake
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benchmark
or motivational factors for others.
Therefore
it is
extermely
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extremely
easy to encourage young adults to express the benefit
those player
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getting
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from doing regular
exercise
in the respective game and
moreover
social media starts to publish the success stories of
those player
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those players
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like how they have
prepare
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themself to take part and win the crown, so
this
kind of
events
automatically boosting the adults to restart their
exercise
and encourage to achieve something in their
life
. After the completion of
those kind
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of
event
we can observe
their
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are few
people
starts
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to rejoin the gym or run in the nearest park,
this
indicates
example
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about
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the
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certain
people
thought.
However
, those big
events
will take place only in four years time period, but we have to take care
about
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our health, so by explaining the
benefits
that drive though doing the
exercise
,
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the
people
who are suffering from
life
long
illness
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due to lack of
workout
and explain the other
benefits
drive from
exercise
we can encourage our friends or family members to start to do
exercise
. Recent research
paper
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indicate that nearly 45% of total patients
suffering
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illness due to lack of
exercise
.
Physcial
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Physical
fitness is the main root cause for
the
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fitness
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therefore
we have to allocate proper time to do
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at-least
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some sort of
exercise
on a regular interval,
however
, doing
workout
on a regular basis is a
diffcuties
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difficulties
task
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therefore
my watching the motivation videos or programme
people
can keep a track.
Therefore
big
event
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events
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like world cups and
olympics
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Olympics
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reflect the real example in a live environment
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therefore
I strongly believe that
those
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that event
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event
will encourage
people
to restart their
workout
to achieve the
benefits
. In conclusion, I brief saying that
as a result
of big
events
a lot of
people
start to restart their
exercise
to achieve
the
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their
life time
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lifetime
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goals like
event
players and make their body and health in a fit manner.
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