Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people deem, due to
advertisement
sale of various
products
has been enhanced, whereas others believed that with the introduction of
this
technology individuals get distracted from the real
products
and
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usage .
This
essay totally agrees with the latter phenomenon and supporting points will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs.
Advertisement
is the platform where people can gather keen knowledge of various
products
and services in terms of
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quality and quantity with other numerous features. Along with it,
few
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commercials are shown on television with a great storyline through which
public
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get attracted towards it easily. Resultantly, they purchase that
product
irrespective of its need.
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For
instance, an
advertisement
was gone popular
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a few
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years back which showed
advantages
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of
alarm
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an alarm
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clock , but purchasing
this
product
was
totally
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a totally
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wastage of money as everyone has
this
feature on their smartphones, still masses purchased respected
product
.
Hence
, it is
cleared
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that people got attracted
with
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the method of
advertisement
not
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with
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the real
product
. Moving
further
, many times large organisations hire famous actors to promote their
product
and gather
attention
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of the audience through these celebrities to boost their sales . Since, celebrities are getting
handsome
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amount
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of money they put their contribution without having necessary information regarding
product
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the product
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they are promoting,
as a
result
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they are held equally responsible for delivering
false
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a false
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product
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products
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to many consumers.
For instance
, a set of plastic microwave containers were advertised by a famous sportsperson , regardless of having
its
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apply
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knowledge that consuming food in plastic containers are not good for health. To conclude, though
advertisement
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is a very good way to have information of goods and services of
new
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launched brands, but sometimes it
distract
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distracts
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the costumers from their real need and
give
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gives
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them
a
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false hope for few
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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