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In some countries, it is illegal for employers to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?

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In the modern-day era, recruitment officers can be fined if they deny someone just by considering their
age
.
This
 essay explains how the selection process of candidates by the experience they have gained can be beneficial for the
company
 development and rejecting staff by their
age
 can put a negative effect. The employer who shortlists applicants by
the
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apply
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old
age
 can bear a huge loss as most of the experienced competition
are
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is
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 not able to get a chance. The folk who are in their 50's or 60's have seen a huge amount of work deals and some of the challenges
a
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an
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 association can face.
However
, some nations have a rule that says, not to consider
age
 in the selection process,
this
 helps the
company
 to get the best candidate suitable for the job. If
a
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an
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 association is having a position open for the senior level manager or the officer, interviewing competition who have 15 or more years of experience can bring so much from the knowledge they have by implementing the great ideas. In some countries, you can be fined if a
company
 is selecting candidates by the
age
,
as a result
 just by
this
 practice enterprises get loses perfect staff.
However
, some of the companies are not really looking forward to using
this
 rule as a positive implication but feel it is a burden to the
company
.
furthermore
,
community
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the community
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belive
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believe
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 old population do not have more energy
as
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than
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 the young crowd because of
this
 result they tend to select energetic staff more. if we consider facts and the market surveys, people who have more experience
also
 have more skills suitable for the job. In conclusion, people who have skills for the job should be considered rather than considered by
age
, and
this
 should be a punishable offence. Some countries are right in their position by putting a law on the
age
 restriction rule.
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