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Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
I believe that in recent years the trend of buying things on the internet has increased rapidly.
This
 has both pros and cons to it
however
 in my opinion its pros outweigh its cons. On the one hand, shopping online has disadvantages that affect the customer since they are not able to see or feel the product. A growing significant problem that has caught my attention is that a large
amount
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 of ordered
products
 tend to disappoint the customer because they either receive a product
which
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 was not intentionally ordered or the product doesn't match their expectations or the price performance.
Consequently
, they will not know which
products
 they should purchase.
On the other hand
, I believe that online shopping is the most effective way of purchasing items right now
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 since the pandemic has affected
this
 topic a lot. I have witnessed that nowadays a large number of brands do not have a shop or a specific place where their
products
 are able to be purchased. Other than the pandemic “Online Shopping” has been a big factor
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 people's lives because of the big impact of social media and the ways brands present themselves.
Second
, buying things on the internet saves people a lot of time. It is the most efficient way with a click of a mouse people can buy what they need and the shippers will deliver their
products
 to the customers as soon as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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