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Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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I believe that in recent years the trend of buying things on the internet has increased rapidly.
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 has both pros and cons to it
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 in my opinion its pros outweigh its cons. On the one hand, shopping online has disadvantages that affect the customer since they are not able to see or feel the product. A growing significant problem that has caught my attention is that a large
amount
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 of ordered
products
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 tend to disappoint the customer because they either receive a product
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 was not intentionally ordered or the product doesn't match their expectations or the price performance.
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, they will not know which
products
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 they should purchase.
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, I believe that online shopping is the most effective way of purchasing items right now
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 since the pandemic has affected
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 topic a lot. I have witnessed that nowadays a large number of brands do not have a shop or a specific place where their
products
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 are able to be purchased. Other than the pandemic “Online Shopping” has been a big factor
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 people's lives because of the big impact of social media and the ways brands present themselves.
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, buying things on the internet saves people a lot of time. It is the most efficient way with a click of a mouse people can buy what they need and the shippers will deliver their
products
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 to the customers as soon as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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