Some people believe that everyone has a right access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the higher education institutions are costly. There is a belief that all
people
should get full tuition remission no matter what is
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the
social background. I would disagree with Change the word
their
this
view,
because universities Remove the comma
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also
need to pay for different things to maintain their status. However
, financial aid should be included anyway.
On the one hand, while
students
improving
own knowledge in the university, they are paying Wrong verb form
improve their
many
facilities Change preposition
for many
such
as laboratories, canteens, salaries for tutors, taxes and campus arraignments for comfortable studying. People
are adding valuations to their diplomas while
paying each term. Moreover
, expensive educational fees make human work harder, because free study have
less Correct subject-verb agreement
has
valuation
and Replace the word
value
people
become more irresponsible toward their university. For example
, I had never finished free university’s
courses and most of Change noun form
university
the
classmates Change the word
my
as
well, even though It could be a great addition Add a missing verb
were as
for
a future career after Change preposition
to
the
graduation.
On another hand, every school is looking for outstanding Correct article usage
apply
students
, which can help to level up the schools’ educations rank and become the top university. Many excellent brains are hiding in low social areas and those families have no opportunity to pay for it. Moreover
, there are also
students
who has
some limitations like serious health disabilities but Change the verb form
have
being
able to study or orphans who Wrong verb form
are
has
no chance to enter universities. In Change the verb form
have
this
cases
, the higher educational policies should provide scholarships or any financial help.
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case
To conclude
, institutions have to get paid from
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by
students
to be able to provide successful and decent teaching and add valuations to their diplomas. The payment
is required for many needs and most Correct article usage
Payment
of
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apply
the
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people
need to understand it, but it is important to remember about
those, for Change preposition
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who
help is necessary.Correct pronoun usage
whom
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