In some cities, governments have tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive or negative?

Technology has changed rapidly for the
last
30 years.
Computer
games
have entered our lives not long ago and nowadays everybody plays with them more or less. It has some undesired effects especially to
children
and some of these are detrimental for their development, but there are a number of ways to minimize
this
situation., The
first
time
we met with
computer
games
was in the '80s with Commodore 64. Since
then
, there has been much progress.
First
-generation y went to internet cafes to play
video
games
,
then
all of us had computers in our home and we played from there. Nowadays, every home has a
computer
and
also
we can play
games
with other tools
such
as tablets and telephones//smart phones. Today,
children
play
video
games
for at least 3 to 4 hours daily. They have very little interest in daily things like school grades, having normal friendships or experiencing real-life adventures.
Also
,
computer
games
give a false feeling of success. Recent publications proved that
this
feeling stimulates the same areas in our brain as real
events
. Due to
this
stimulation,
children
don’t appreciate real-life achievements or they think they would obtain prizes easily like
video
games
. If they don’t earn anything in real life
this
easily, they spend more
time
in
video
games
to get away from
this
burden. Luckily,
this
situation doesn’t seem hopeless. There are a lot of ways to get them interested in real-life
events
.
First
of all, families have to educate their younglings/youngsters about
video
games
and they have to restrict the
time
spent.
Secondly
, they have to encourage their
children
to do hobbies like doing sports or courses
such
as painting or music. With that, they won’t have
time
to spend on
games
.
In addition
to
this
, in these
events
, they make new friends and socialize with them.
Also
if they show progress in one of these things, they might taste the real victory and they want to feel the same as other life
events
. All in all, parents don’t necessarily afraid of
video
games
. İf they educate their
children
, show them other ways to be entertained, spend more
time
with them, they won’t be affected by
video
games
this
much.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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