Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People believe that young ones need to listen
the
rules and regulations of their elders and teachers desire to be. While others say that Change preposition
to the
the
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children
needs
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need
a
independence and self-control in solving problems,I agree. In Remove the article
apply
this
essay, I will discuss both sides and give necessary
opinion.
On the one hand,parents who are not controlled too much and give them Correct article usage
the necessary
choice
of choosing alternatives have more outcomes, because they can resolve the problems and issues easily.Add an article
the choice
a choice
Secondly
,this
results in less
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fewer
behavioral
and psychological impacts which are cognitive and mental abilities. To illustrate Change the spelling
behavioural
this
,youngsters are quick in decision-making
process and analysing Add an article
the decision-making
of
future plans in education and jobs.
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On the other hand
, caregivers who control their children
have some drawbacks in problem-solving and doing independent work in the future because of lack
of motivation. Correct article usage
a lack
For instance
, a child needs a
initiation to develop skills, Change the article
an
such
as a building blocks
or solving a puzzle. Correct the article-noun agreement
building blocks
a building block
Furthermore
,controlling too much can impact on
behavioural issues. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
,Young children
need to build a
confidence and self-esteem,Remove the article
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this
helps them to gain a
confidence and positive behaviour. Remove the article
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Such
asCorrect quantifier usage
Such
,
poor concentration Remove the comma
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and
anxiety,depression. Correct word choice
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Moreover
,this
can be avoided by using developmental
appropriate activities which are used as Change the adjective
developmentally
curriculum based
learning.
Add a hyphen
curriculum-based
Lastly
,too much
controlled kids have some drawbacks when they grow Change the quantifier
many
in
later Change preposition
at
ages
. To illustrate Fix the agreement mistake
age
this
, individuals can face negative outcomes to deal situations
in and around Change preposition
with situations
community
because of Add an article
the community
the
too much dependency. Correct article usage
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For example
,folks have fear of implementing work that can result to get anger and frustrations of results.
To conclude,teachers and caregivers who keep expecting that their children
need to listen and apply in practical life can have some problems in later life. Whereas,people who are living decisions for their child have better future expectancy.Submitted by ar050682 on
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