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In the past, museums stored information about culture and history. However, nowadays this information can be found through the Internet, so there is no need for museums. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

#museums #information #culture #history #internet
The supplied diagram highlights the information with regard to the production of frozen
fish
 pies. According to the diagram, we can observe that
such
 a
pie
 is composed of several ingredients. A more detailed look at
this
 process affords to infer that at
first
, we should take a microwaveable container.
Secondly
, we need to prepare ingredients by means of which we are going to cook. We should take peas,
fish
, sauce and potatoes. After that, we are ready to produce a
pie
. At the beginning of production, we need to pour the sauce
in
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 the microwaveable container. Onwards, we take a
fish
, cut down it and mix
fish
 pieces with the sauce.
Then
, we add peas and potatoes, which are chopped into circles.
Also
 noteworthy is that potatoes should locate above the rest of the ingredients across the
pie
. Ultimately, we put a product into a microwave and expect when the
fish
pie
 will be ready.
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