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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think this books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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Inclination
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 toward fictional novels and dramas based on
crime
 incidents has become much more popular in the
last
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decade. A group of
people
 are watching
such
 shows to make themselves aware of
such
henious
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heinous
 incidents
,
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 so that
such
 problems do not arise to them. In my opinion, though these types of
program
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programs
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 will make
people
 aware, that can have a negative impact on youth. To embark on, as per the present condition,
people
 are supposed to take care of themselves due to
increasing
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crime
 rate.
People
 can know in
details
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detail
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 about the procedure and
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loopholes
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loop holes
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loopholes
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 of the same by reading books or watching
such
 television
program
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programs
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.
These
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This
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 helps them to make
learn
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learning
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 about the consequences of doing criminal activities.
Moreover
,
this
 vivid
audio visual
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audiovisual
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 presentation and detailed
narated
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narrated
 description
helps
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help
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people
 to get rid
occurance
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occurrence
 of
such
 incidents with them. When
people
 read fictional novels they become well aware of
criminal
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the criminal
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 mind and their activities which in the long run helps them to survive in
the
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society. In
this
 case, it is worth mentioning that a TV
program
 namely "
Crime
 files" has helped in reducing the banking OTP(
one time
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one-time
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 password) fraud as
people
 became aware of that.
Thus
, it is evident that these helped
people
 to save their money from
such
 fraud;
therefore
,
people
 are watching
such
 programs.
On the other hand
,
such
crime
scene
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scenes
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 may have a negative impact on the mind of adolescents.
This
 violent video or
descrpitive
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descriptive
 narration may have a negative impact on their growing minds and can lead to
a
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trauma even.
In addition
 to
this
, they may become involved in juvenile activities when they face
shortage
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a shortage
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 of pocket money. To mitigate the crunch of money they may plan for robbery in the same way as shown
in
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on
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 TV. Illustration can be given, just a few months ago, a bank robbery took place in Allahabad in the same way as shown in "Sabdhan India." The dark side of
this
 is the less. To conclude, telecasted
program
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programs
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 and written
story books
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storybooks
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 on
crime
 make
people
 well aware in advance
from
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of
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such
 mishappening;
however
,
young
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the young
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mind
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minds
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 may become muddy and prone to
felony
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a felony
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 by applying those
formula
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formulas
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 of
crime
. In my opinion,
this
types
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type
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 of telecasting should be restricted to awareness only,
detailed
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the detailed
a detailed
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procedure
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procedures
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 must not
be
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revel
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revelled
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reveled
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revealed
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.
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