unemployment is one of the biggest problem of contempory society. What do you think are the main cause of unemployment.what Solutions can you suggest?

Now a days
Correct the word
Nowadays
show examples
, there is a biggest difficult situation,due to lack of job in the modern societies.
This
essay will discuss
about
Remove the preposition
apply
show examples
the causes of
this
problem along with possible solutions to elevate them. To commence with, one of
main
Add an article
the main
show examples
reason
Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
show examples
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
this
problem is the upcoming technological devices.
New
Correct article usage
The new
show examples
machinary
Correct your spelling
machinery
system has been updated in most areas of the world. To explicate it, in factories almost work has been done by instruments and tools function because it can
worked
Change the verb form
work
show examples
for many and more hours.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by workers department and found that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
most of the people are jobless due to the current
mechanisum
Correct your spelling
mechanism
system. To solve it, the government should give
opportunity
Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
show examples
to jobless persons who
requires
Change the verb form
require
show examples
money for their daily uses in life. Probing
further
, another cause of the difficulty is lack of education because in
rural
Add an article
a rural
show examples
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
show examples
, studies are not available for children and they became jobless in their future. To explain it, companies needs
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
appropriate employment who are educated and do some benefits in
Add an article
the work
show examples
work place
Correct your spelling
workplace
show examples
.
However
Add a comma
,However
show examples
due to uneducated people,
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
will not give
Add an article
the job
a job
show examples
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
to
Add an article
the person
show examples
person
Fix the agreement mistake
people
show examples
.
For example
, an article was published in ‘The Hindu’ in
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
2019, revealed that there are many unemployed
person
Change to a plural noun
people
show examples
because of their
uncomplete
Correct your spelling
incomplete
show examples
qualification.
Hence
, it can solve by giving free education provides in countryside area and in
needy
Add an article
a needy
show examples
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
show examples
. To conclude
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
, unemployment has detrimental effects on
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
show examples
because of
new
Correct article usage
the new
show examples
mechanary
Correct your spelling
machinery
system and lack of
educate
Change the verb form
educating
show examples
employes
Correct your spelling
employees
show examples
. So government should think about
to give
Change the verb form
giving
show examples
proper education to every mankind and start companies where
worker
Add an article
a worker
the worker
show examples
can
works
Change the verb form
work
show examples
rather
then
Replace the word
than
show examples
technology.
Submitted by Rajkhyaliya334 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: